Success Criteria
DEEP FEATURES
Brainstorms to identify main ideas to be used in writing.
Uses most of the main ideas in the writing.
Uses paragraphs and sequences ideas.
Attempts to end writing with a simple conclusions.
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SURFACE FEATURES
Spells most words correctly.
Uses capital letters, full stops, commas, apostrophes, question marks, exclamation marks.
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THE REWORKER / EDITOR
Rereads writing to edit out information that does not improve the message.
Rereads writing to edit in words and phrases that improve the message.
Uses a dictionary to identify and check spelling attempts.
Checks writing for basic punctuation.
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Going To Taupo
It was time to go to Taupo. George had a friend over to come to Taupo. We hopped in the car and zoomed off to my grannys house (she owns the batch) to get the keys. 2 hours later “Mum turn now.” Creak! We are here!!! FINALLY.
A day later we went to the AC Baths. First we went on the hydro slides. I kept on the left slide until George went on right slide. The left slide was the slowest the right was the fastest. There was a Tarzan swing and you had to be one point five metres and under and George was over but he still did it. Our trick was that we ran to the side and jumped then we would swing around.
When Richie came we went to the snowy mountains and got some red toboggans. We went to Happy Valley (which is a tobogganing place). First me and Oliver went together. Me and Oliver turned with our feet but Tom turned with his body weight and his hand which he could barely feel.
Mum’s sister came with her two babies and stayed with us. That night Ivy was screaming and Annette Kate was trying to stop her by tipping her upside down and putting her head out the window but that didn't do anything. Then Mum came in and said ‘By cricky you don’t want to see Uncle Steve come in because he will be furious.”
The last day was here! We were getting ready by: packing our bags, cleaning the batch, packing the bags into the car. About 8:00 we left. We stopped so Mum, Oliver, George could get a hug from Richie. 30 kilometres away we were at the airport to drop Richie off. Richie gave me an upside down hug. We were pretty early so he had to wait in the airport. In the car I felt so tired. My eyes were nearly closed but I didn't fall asleep. We were home first because Mum had to drop Tom off. I had a holiday AWESOMENESS!!!!!!!!!
